Your hands trace the contours
I smile
You softly let your fingers scroll
on my warm skin
I smell green apples
what is it?
Your perfume or incense?
In the quiet
I can hear your heartbeat
and you can touch mine.
Each scar, each mark,
has a tale to tell!
you gently brush
a stray strand of hair
from my face
tuck it behind my ear
and trace
a gushing stream of cold water
down my neck,
I release my stiff shoulders
my breast bone loosens
the binoculars of my heart
read every line in your palm!
In a small salon
two women
share their stories
without a word
and give each other
the gift of empathy.
“This post is a part of ‘UMeU’ Poetry Blog Hop #UMeUBlogHop organized by Manas Mukul . The Event is sponsored by Soul Craft and You, Me & The Universe.”
Wow Pooja! Really enjoyed the reversal, or I must say the reveal at the end. It was a clever way to get the reader to go back to the beginning to enjoy the details again. Nicely done👏
ReplyDeleteThanks Namratha, this is from the stream of consciousness school literally
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ReplyDeleteread every line in your palm!
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the gift of empathy...
Wow...what imagery and metaphors and then what a beautiful twist at the end. Loved this one. A fan forever Pooja ji. I am really thankful that you hopped on to the #UMeUBlogHop
Thanks a lot Manas for inspiring this, glad you liked it
DeleteIn these few words you have said a lot. Liked the last line when you said, two women share their stories without a word and give each other the gift of empathy..how beautifully you expressed
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Swati, I love shorter poems
DeleteA many layered poem, that one could interpret as they wished to. Very good!
ReplyDeleteMayuri/Sirimiri
yes that is the idea for all poetry, isn't it?
DeleteWhat a beautiful twist towards the end...loved the poem ❤️
ReplyDeleteThanks Leela
DeleteLoved it...especially the twist towards the end ❤️
ReplyDeleteLoved the imagery, setting and the beautiful metaphors you have used. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteDeepika Sharma
What is a poet without metaphors! Glad you liked it
DeleteI so loved the surprise in the end, I was being swayed to a parallel world and then came the beautiful realisation. The weave is beautiful.
ReplyDeletePoetry us essentially about the "weave" thanks Roma
DeleteGreen apple fragrance, the salon experience & the relaxing atmosphere very creatively expressed.
ReplyDeleteGreat twist, Pooja :)
The twist was indeed the original plot haha! Thanks for reading
DeleteI need a massage straight away! You have created the entire atmosphere and loved the way you gave a twist to it. This is also a very unique take on the theme. Enjoyed reading it twice :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting and reading Rashi, twice over!
DeleteOMG! What a twist in the end 😁😁 This was fun to read
ReplyDeleteWow, what a beautiful relationship expressed in these lines. I'm sure gonna remember this in my every salon visit. You have woven the words nicely to capture this story with multilayers.
ReplyDeleteYes layers fascinate me! Gracias
DeletePooja, you have expressed the thoughts and it played in to readers mind with many perspectives, only a poetry artist like you can do it. And the end was bang on.
ReplyDelete"poetry artist" that is a beautiful compliment , thanks
DeleteOh my God what a twist at the end... Just didn't expect it at all. Lovely composition. And it leaves you with so many thoughts too. It really sometimes is all about an empathetic touch more than the words. And you expressed this thought so beautifully.
ReplyDeleteYes touch conveys so much, thanks for reading
DeleteWot an awesome piece. Super loved the twist in the end. Reread it again to enjoy the experience all over😀
ReplyDeleteRereading wow! thanks
ReplyDeleteWow. That is a beautiful poem filled with empathy the best part is most of such meetings are like they meet for the very first time.
ReplyDeleteIndeed, you are right, thanks
DeleteLoved your imaginary, the twist at the end, totally unpredictable. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, thanks
ReplyDeleteThe twist was what made the difference….it made the piece extraordinary
ReplyDeleteThank you Shalini
DeleteGreat expression of thoughts in beautiful words with an decisive twist which suddenly changes the nature of an erotic composition into an empathetic one. Nice to read this.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mithlesh
DeleteLoved this poem and the twist at the end. This is an awesome piece of poetry. A different yet unique take on this theme I must say.
ReplyDeleteLoved this poem and the twist at the end. This is an awesome piece pf poetry or I must say a different yet unique take on this theme.
ReplyDeleteThanks for acknowledging the uniqueness
DeleteLoved the unique take of the poems.The reveal in the end was so good.I am able to connect with the thought process of the poem.So beautiful
ReplyDeleteGlad you were able to connect Gowri
DeleteFab piece, Pooja! Salon experience has ceased thanks to pandemic but reading your poems made me relish the mood uplift I used to get and beauty of small talks with strangers. Loved this.
ReplyDeleteThanks Pragnya yes it has become even more special now
DeleteOh, how I miss the good pre-pandemoc spa session. :D
ReplyDeleteJokes aside, I loved the twist the denouement brought along.
I had quite expected it to run a romantic course, but man, isn't life (and poetry) full of surprises.
Cleverly crafted indeed!
Thanks that you liked the twist!
DeleteA very nuanced , balanced and brilliantly composed poem from you. Each line is an imagery and so well portrayed! The poem depicts so many layers in it and certainly the twist at the end just blew me away! Hats off Pooja. Loved it .
ReplyDeleteThanks Chinmayee glad you liked it
DeleteWow! That was quite an unexpected twist in the end. I imagined this poem to be about something else but the end changed the entire meaning of it. That's the beauty of this poem....enjoyed reading it, Pooja ji
ReplyDeleteWow!Each scar, each mark, has a tale to tell
ReplyDeleteThis line says alot! But yes, The twist at the end brought a smile to my face. It pushed me to read the whole again, I literally found myself surround in the ambience of relaxing salon! Wonderfully weaved!
Wow! Simply loved the way you have layered this poem. Its so relatable and yet so fresh and different. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteI read it then re-read it. I guess the reason is obvious. It is beautifully composed. It takes to me to another place in my imagination but your last lines took it somewhere else. I am amazed the way the this comes out at the end. Great...
ReplyDeleteThanks Neha
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